Hate to say this, but you need your RP to be approved before you can start, and it also needs a lot of work. The plot is too short, the skeletons do not make sense, and there is a large chunk of info still needed. I suggest you take more time to redo this, and really think about it for a while.
Side note, please use the modify button to update any of your posts. If your post is the most recent, add to it, or wait for a reply before posting again.
