Pokémon Universe > Quests & Plots
The war of the rapidash and gyarados gyms
obi:
Haha, "[words deleted]". And here I thought I was being couth using the proper term instead of slang.
Okay, okay. No more talking about or referencing *cough*youknow*cough* ;)
duotent:
Um...if I understand it, the enemy gym leaders were opposite genders right? So...how can they be brothers? Unless the chick suddenly changes gender halfway through and in that case you should really make a note of it. The rest is confusing and I rather not get into it. It has potential, but it is far from actual quest material (IMO). Clean up some of your prose and think about your storyline a bit more.
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um you made a mistake there i said one of the quest givers was a girl
BuzzKillington:
i dont like how it seems a simple battle between rivals and suddenly begcomes this epic legendary battle i dont like legendaries anyway but it seems convoluted and underthought the plot seems to jump with key points missing.
but in defence of the roignial post the male and female were just members of the gymns not the gym leaders so the leaders are brothers and the two people are newly joined members DAH!
ChibiVampire:
Your quest is a good idea, Its just a little hard to understand. Maybe you made a type or something.
But, the sub mission was a good idea, I thought that was an awesome chance for exp... XD!
neokills:
not a bad idea but the way you presented it is very confusing, you should clear things up and try to keep it a lil simple so its easy to put into the game.
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