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Title: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 13, 2010, 04:00:01 AM
The Beginning is The End
Pt 1.

About a man’s life who can’t his life back together, will he make it through? What type of weird things will he encounter? Be a spy? Watch his girl die? Have flashbacks? The new adventure, mystery, action short story series I have been working on called “The Beginning is The End” if you want me to continue it, keep commenting and giving me feedback. Thank you.
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   I didn’t know where I was running to, all I knew is that I wanted to get out. I was running from things that couldn’t be forgotten. The look on her face, just sitting there in the rain. The look on her pale, colorless face, her eyes wide open. I couldn’t run away from this nightmare…

   Before I continue, let me tell you who I am. My name is Jeremy Jones. I’m twenty-one years old, around five foot nine, and have some muscle. I’m Caucasian, and grew up in the West, up in Washington.

   I ran back to my house, not knowing what I was thinking. I turned the TV. The news came on. At  the bottom it said “BREAKING NEWS: THIS JUST IN!” I watched the news as it explained what had happened just thirty-four hours ago. I put my head down on my knees, and cried. Tears came flowing out of my eyes, as if someone turned the faucet on in my head. I had to get my life straightened up. But how?

   I decided I had to get her out of my head, I had to get out of the town, and away from this. But then that would be running, and I can’t run. Tomorrow was work, and I couldn’t miss another day or else I would get fired.

   “This is so amazing! How did you do it?”
   “I have my ways baby, now let’s get going.”

   I woke up in a jolt. I was in puddle of sweat, and I heard my alarm go off. It was work. I hopped in the shower, and went to the worst job in the world, working at a retirement home. I walked outside, as the big star beamed down in the cerulean colored sky. I was hoping it would be a pretty good day, but I was wrong.

   I made it to work, and when I went inside, everyone stared at me. The most rude person at work, Bill, walked up to me.
   “How’s Jill?” I soon became furious, my head storming with every type of emotion possible. I yelled, tackled him to the ground and started throwing as many punches as I could. People pulled me off finally. My boss called me in, and that was the end of my job…

TO BE CONTINUED….

The next one will be about him moving, starting a new life. And he will soon find himself in the military. What happens next?
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: LeoReborn on August 13, 2010, 04:10:09 AM
W....O....W

I liked how it kept you guessing, Like:

Jill, what happened? is she dead? How did she Die?

All of those questions, they added to the Character of JJ.
His Flashbacks, its like he lost his memory, and is slowly Regaining them, as he does, he gets more and more Upset.

The Incident: Bill Vs. JJ = JJ snaps.

....Wow, I was so overwhelmed, I started Spitting lots of it out at once!!!(Thats good.) I barely have any Idea what I just Said....
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 13, 2010, 04:11:51 AM
Haha thank you a lot! I was hoping it'd keep people guessing. So do you think I should continue it?
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: LeoReborn on August 13, 2010, 04:13:30 AM
Are you Kidding? Its that sense of Mystery that keeps them hooked!!! Yes. Keep On!!!!
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: St. Jimmy on August 13, 2010, 04:16:57 AM
I love this. It makes me think of questions constantly! Don't stop this!
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: LeoReborn on August 13, 2010, 04:19:29 AM
See, I wasn't on Meth.... >_> <_<

I know, I know, Geez you hallucinations are a Pain in the Neck =P
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 13, 2010, 04:22:51 AM
Lol thank you a lot. I will keep it going. Thank you all!
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: UnationConsideration on August 13, 2010, 04:26:21 AM
Stupid pencil cliff hanger
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: LeoReborn on August 13, 2010, 04:29:44 AM
.....Jimmy, Do you wanna hit Drbg with a Shovel, Or Should I?

That was the point...Its supposed to Mystify/Amaze/Confuse/Overwhelm you. =P
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: UnationConsideration on August 13, 2010, 04:30:56 AM
Ive been through so much emo stuff I dont care >::(
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: St. Jimmy on August 13, 2010, 04:31:53 AM
x_tmasta_x drbg doesnt know what hes talking about
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 13, 2010, 04:39:37 AM
Lol it's fine people have different opinions =D
but I'll still continue it.
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: St. Jimmy on August 13, 2010, 04:39:59 AM
Good! ;)
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 13, 2010, 04:52:21 AM
Lol yeah. One negative comment won't make me stop lol.
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: UnationConsideration on August 13, 2010, 03:26:04 PM
:( I did not mean to be mean though. I havent even read it rofl. St.Jimmy no you dont know what your talking about fewl. *Mad face*  >:(
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Eulogy on August 14, 2010, 05:58:26 AM
Lol it's fine I didn't take it as a huge insult, just a reminder.
Title: Re: The Beginning is The End. Pt 1 Ch 1
Post by: Jerry on August 14, 2010, 06:39:59 PM
Hmm... that explains pretty much everything...

Anyway, back on topic, nice piece of writing. You kept the suspense... and now, I'm going for the next part. :P