[Story] Pokemon's end with the King of Pokemons

[FireDarkGuy]

CHAPTER I: Teachers

In a world where Pokemons were living on the Earth, Dialga and Palkia, at their dead chair had no choice: they created The King of All Pokemons. At the start it was a little egg with pink and white shapes on a blue cover. After his born, his parents died. Dialga and Palkia are now spirits in the “Dead Pokemon’s Life”. The little egg has been left on the Volcano.
   It was so hot, so the egg evolved in Diakia in the second day. It was the fastest evolve ever. It learned Fire moves on the Volcano with The Legendary Groudon. After he left his life, Diakia found Entei in the Volcano. The powerful Entei teaches very powerful fire attacks.   
   When Entei died too, he ran outside the Volcano where he saw Ho-oh flying. Ho-oh become Diakia’s master for a longer while and Diakia learned to fly so much that he can go EVERYWHERE in the Big Universe. There he found Deoxys. Deoxys teaches powerful physical attacks. Before Deoxys died, he sent Diakia to Mewtwo to continue its lessons. Mewtwo with 2% more powerful than Deoxys, it taught Diakia what Deoxys started.
   Mewtwo and other legendary Pokemons died in the same time. Diakia had to live single. There remained only 15% from the Pokemons. The life has been destroyed. What Diakia had to do? Where he has to go?

The end of CHAPTER I
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Chapter II: Single on the Earth


   Diakia started a new search: Searching for life.

   AFTER 15 DAYS ...

   Diakia will faint if it doesn't eat something. He it's so hungry that it can eat a Pokemon.Ow... In the forest he fells asleep. A Pokemon comes close to Diakia. It's a physical Pokemon. It started to study Diakia. No Pokemon looks like him.
   Diakia wakes up in a treehouse. He walks outside and 3 Pokemons approach. The pokemos are: Raichu, Sudowoodo, Pachirisu. The unknown Pokemon from the forest is hiding. It's studying Diakia's acting.
   With Diakia's training he smells the "Unknown Pokemon from the forest" and uses the unlearned move Roar. The physical Pokemon scares and shows up: wow! It's Mewtwo, the survivor. He didn't really die. Mewtwo's decision is to create a group for deadly sickness's resistence.
   
   AFTER 1 HARD MONTH...
   
   - Watch out, Pachirisu!
   - Wh...Wh...What?
   - The sick Graveler's Rock Throw!!
   The Rock Throw hits Pachirisu. Mewtwo tries to repair the damage but...Pachirisu was low...
   - Pachirisu isn't strong enough. Let him backward! says the sad Mewtwo.
   - Ple...ple...please...Let me with you! I will do my b...b...best!
   Mewtwo uses Hyper Punch. Pachrisu hits deadly the ground.
   - Mewtwo!! rages Diakia.
   - WHAT?
   - You can't be such rude, you idiot!
   - HOW DID YOU CALLED ME?!
   Diakia uses invisibillity and hits Mewtwo from its back.
   - Argh! Let's calm down...This is a survival group not a rival one.
   - WHY YOU HIT PACHIRISU?
   - YOU BOTH GOT TO STOP! LET'S CONTINUE OUR WAY TO RECRUIT MORE POKEMONS.
   - And what about Pachirisu, Sudowoodo? says the angry Diakia.
   - Mewtwo was right. He was too low. The cute can't win the battle.
   - ...

The end of CHAPTER II
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Chapter III:  Strong Recruit

Our heroes ran out from the forest. The new target: China.
      
   AFTER 15 DAYS IN CHINA...

   - I think we're the single survivors...
   - If were the single survivors we have no reason to live. says Raichu
   - Shut up! The end of Pokemon World can't be true!
   A weird creature was looking at 'em. Mewtwo and Diakia's physical power detected the weird creature. Their reactions was very agressive. The creature avoid all the hits.
   - WHO THE HELL ARE YOU? Says Raichu
   - My name is Gro-oh. My parents are Groudon and Ho-oh.
   - My teachers...
   - MY PARENTS ARE YOUR TEACHERS? ARE THEY ALIVE?
   - They died after I've been taught.
   - You..You...YOU KILED MY PARENTS!
   A hard battle started between Gro-oh and Diakia. Even if Diakia's had strong teachers he is too young to mentain a hard battle. He fainted so fast. Mewtwo continued its battle. Raichu and Sudowoodo entered the battle too.
   This battle took 2 hard days. It created earthquakes and forest burning.
   Sudowoodo fainted. Raichu continued and Gro-oh finished. Mewtwo won the fight.
   - Wh...What the...How the hell I lost?
   - You're not enough trained. From now you are my rival. Now get out!
   - AAARRGHHH!
   Gro-oh used Self-destruct. Mewtwo fainted. Our heroes and Gro-oh have been left on the blody ground.
   
   NEXT MORNING...

   - Where are we?
   - Huh? In China you silly-head.
   - No, no! Wake up! Watch this!
   - WHAT THE HECK?
   - WOW!
   - WHAT THE?!
   The survived group waked up on a new planet called Mars. The single Pokemon that can send fainted Pokemons from a planet to other is "Raiquaza".
   - Raiquaza is alive?
   Gro-oh started crying.   
   - What happened?
   - My parents are... Dead...And I've been left on a red planet where is no life.
   - Shut up you idiot! My parents are Dialga and Palkia. They're both dead. How you think I am feeling?
   - Our recruiting system is over here. says Raichu.
   - Raichu's right!
   - We're not flying type Pokemons. We have no chance to survive on MARS.
   - I think...Me and Mewtwo can teleport all of you to Raiquaza...
   - And you?
   - Hmpf! Diakia is right! We cannot teleport ALL of us. Only you, guys. We will try to survive until our energy will come back to us.
   - This can't be possible!What will happen to our team?
   - Raiquaza will take care of you. Oh, watch out for the Raiquaza's guardian. If one member can find Raiquaza all the members wil be saved...Even us! Just try to pass over the guardians and we will be saved. Good Luck!
   Diakia and Mewtwo physical concentrate on the teleport. After Raichu, Sudowoodo and Gro-oh have been teleported Mewtwo and Diakia fainted.
   At the Raiquaza's No-Universe Temple entrance the guardians become angry and attacked the members.
   - Okay, let's do this!

The end of CHAPTER III
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CHAPTER IV: Saving the world with Raiquaza

Gro-oh and Raichu remained to fight and Sudowoodo ran to Raiquaza.
   When Sudowoodo entered Raiquaza's room a flash-light appeared. Sudowoodo almost blind.
   - GRWAAH! WHAT FREAK WAKED ME UP?
   - AAAAAARH!!!! Uh...My name is...is...Sudowoodo...
   - GRWAAH! WHAT DO YOU WANT?   
   - I...need some...help...Can you save the planet? All the Pokemons are dying and my friends are on the Mars.
   - I SENT YOU THERE SO YOU CAN'T CONTACT ME!
   Raiquaza used Hyper Beam. Sudowoodo died.
   .....While.....
   - MOVE IT! MY FRIEND NEEDS HELP!
   One guardian fainted, in the end.
   - Raichu! Go help Sudowoodo! I will take care of this guy.
   - Thanks,good luck!
   Raichu avoided the Raiquaza's Tail Whip.
   - SUDOWOODO!!!! NO!!!! WHAT YOU DID TO HIM?
   - My sleep has been disturbed by that trash.
   - Sudowoodo isn't trash! He survived from the sickness!
   - I don't care about him. Now go to him!
   Raiquaza used Hyper Beam and Raichu avoided again its attack. Gro-oh used Hyper Beam too. Raiquaza scared and he has been hitted.
   - Uh...Oh...Wh...WHAT THE?! Okay! Okay! I'll teleport your friends here!
   Diakia and Mewtwo have been teleported.
   - Now! Fast! I saw the Earth un-coloring!
   - I can't...I am not physical strong enough.
   - Then just send us home!
   - All I can do is to come with you.
   - JUST SEND US HOME!
   Raiquaza joined the survival team. After a hard teleport all the team has been fainted.

   SECOND DAY........

   - Raiquaza, Gro-oh, Raichu, watch this!
   The planet is almost red, like Mars. There remained only 2% from all the Pokemons.
   - It's the world's end without Pokemons.
   - Let's search some life...
   - Okay let's go!


The end of Chapter IV   
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Chapter V: The world is saved


Coming...
#Edited 4 time(s)

[Bing]

What... The... Hell...?

[Desbear]

What... The... Hell...?

I'm with you.

[NexosYourGayBestFriend96]

What the bloody hell is this! Why am I British?

[FireDarkGuy]

Serously...What's the problem? What you don't like?

[Tickles]

All I can ask is, what is the whole plot of this? I have read a lot in my life, and this is completely jumbled. I'm sure you put a lot of thought into this, but might I suggest taking the time to sit back, brainstorm your ideas, then after you have the best in the list, place them on a time chart so you know what comes in first, what comes in next, when they come in, wht events are taking place, where is it, and who is part of it. This is the backbone of story writing, the way you write it is what makes the difference between a great story and a bad story.

[Deion1]

Thats what they teach in high school

[CelaGhost]

I love it!
You just need to organize it better cause the dialogue and sometimes the plain writing.. is confusing.
You need to edit your story cause the grammar sucks...