The pub with no ???

[duotent]

you walk into town and you find a Pub next to the pokemon center you walk in and there's no customers the owner comes up and asks you if you will get him some more he says the best brewery is in town/city (a place that takes time to travel to) you reach there and all the workers pokemon attack you without orders(mostly charmanders and machops)  yoou fight them all (6 pokemon in all) you reach the owner and he gives you a crate of you take it to the owner of the bar and he gives you a reward money and exp he also says you can buy from him any time

[Jerry]

You walk into town and you find a Pub next to the pokemon center. You walk in and there's there are no customers

What if there are players in there?
Why are there no customers? What happened?

The owner comes up and asks you if you will get him some more He says the best brewery is in town/city (a place that takes time to travel to remote place) You reach there and all the workers' pokemon attack you without orders warning (mostly charmanders and machops)  Yoou fight them all (6 pokemon in all) . Then you reach the owner and he gives you a crate of You take it to the owner of the bar and he gives you a reward money and exp. He also says you can buy from him any time

Ok, this one is really confusing.

The owner comes up and asks you if you will get him some more He says the best brewery is in town/city (a remote place)

How can you know the ?

You reach there and all the workers' pokemon attack you without warning (mostly charmanders and machops)

Why do the pokemon of the workers attack you like that? Where are their owners?

Then you reach the owner and he gives you a crate of

What owner? I know only one owner here, the one who owns the Pub.

[obi]

You walk into Funky town and you find a Pub next to the Pokémon center. You walk in and there're no customers. The owner comes up and asks you if you will get him some more beer. He says the best brewery is in Inebriation Station (a place that takes time to travel to). You get there and all the workers' Pokémon attack you without orders(mostly Charmanders and Machops).  You fight them all (6 Pokémon in all (The same amount of cans in a 6-pack. Coincidence? Or not?)). You reach the owner and he gives you a crate of beer. You take it to the owner of the bar and he gives you a reward money and exp. He also says you can buy beer from him any time.

God, this made me feel like a 5th grade English teacher.

[Kuhns]

Lol. Jerry you're doing it wrong. The whole point of correcting a badly written paragraph is to correct the badly written paragraph...completely.

Obi did a better job. Nice comments. xD

Duotent, you need to think about your quests more. Also, try to refrain from typing '' every five words. KTHANX!

[Minsi]

Is beer really appropriate for this quest? I mean... If you complete it and are allowed to buy beer from the owner whenever you want, it would be kinda odd having a younger character drinking it. [Woot drunk 10 year old characters! xD] Can it be switched to soda or something else?

It's more original that the last quest you suggested, I'll say that much.

[duotent]

sorry??? actually means B/E/E/R it wont let me spell it i made the quest cause i know hspirit loves B/E/E/R Lol

[obi]

sorry??? actually means B/E/E/R it wont let me spell it i made the quest cause i know hspirit loves B/E/E/R Lol

Seriously? Cause it let me spell beer when I edited your quest. Weird. Plus, I know there's uncensored f-bombs in that Hitmonlee thread, so censoring 'beer' really makes no sense. (typed out f*ck. It gave me 'chansey'. WTF?!)

Also, in my 'Bat-Served' thread, I had originally typed out 'b*tch' in the Juggernaut scene (sans the asterisk) and it automatically got replaced by the word 'woman'. Which makes me wonder what's more offensive: Being censored, or the forums thinking woman was a suitable replacement word (not all b*tches are female, you sexist boards).

[Phosphorous]

sorry??? actually means B/E/E/R it wont let me spell it i made the quest cause i know hspirit loves B/E/E/R Lol

Seriously? Cause it let me spell beer when I edited your quest. Weird. Plus, I know there's uncensored f-bombs in that Hitmonlee thread, so censoring 'beer' really makes no sense. (typed out f*ck. It gave me 'chansey'. WTF?!)

Also, in my 'Bat-Served' thread, I had originally typed out 'b*tch' in the Juggernaut scene (sans the asterisk) and it automatically got replaced by the word 'woman'. Which makes me wonder what's more offensive: Being censored, or the forums thinking woman was a suitable replacement word (not all b*tches are female, you sexist boards).

All your post on this thread made me cry from laughing. From correcting Duotents paragraph, to "or the forums thinking woman was a suitable replacement word" xD

[Jerry]

Lol. Jerry you're doing it wrong. The whole point of correcting a badly written paragraph is to correct the badly written paragraph...completely.

Obi did a better job. Nice comments. xD

Duotent, you need to think about your quests more. Also, try to refrain from typing '' every five words. KTHANX!

Ok, better not put that up again then... I didn't know whether the smilies needed to be replaced. I know they made it look weird, but wasn't quite sure since nothing tells us that the PU team will use the names of the towns/people/cites/etc.

But other than that, nobody commented on the quest itself, except for the 'beer'...

[obi]

But other than that, nobody commented on the quest itself, except for the 'beer'...

Well, to be fair, there's not a whole lot anybody can say at this point, really. "You got to PLACE and get THING then get STUFF" Okay, well, where is place? What thing are we getting? And, most importantly, do we even want or need the stuff we're receiving at the end? I think duotent needs to give us some more specifics before anyone can make any legitimate comments on this here quest.

[Jerry]

That's it! Duodent came here, and didn't even seem to pay attention to the posts, but only the last post which mentioned beer...

[baralai15]

Seems like a good outline to a quest but definetely needs more detail and be though out more.