All I have to say is: "Ouch, my eyes hurt." Tone down on the bright white backgrounds for your text. I don't why you can't just type it all out normally. The site consists of dark colors, so your quests are a tad painful to look at when the page comes up.

On another note, your first quest doesn't really give the reader a lot to go on and I can't really say much on the third either. The second however, caught my attention at the very end. If there are different Pokemon to catch, why not make the rewards depend on the Pokemon brought back to the lady?

Well When you first play the game there would be a guy with an exclamation point this on over his head ! and he would say something like:

"Can I teach you how too use your stuff?" and you would say yes. and then

He would show you how to use your basic tools and how to catch and battle wild Pokemon. and Then he would ask you for a battle. and then he would give you a techy tv. that would show you how to use your stuff. (supporting idea Pokemon Zoo.)and then After the battle he would take you to get your Pokedex and he would take you to the Pokemon zoo too help you with your Pokedex. and

That's my quest.

Most of the players are Pokemon fans already, and it's safe to assume that they've played the games, if only just one, before. In that regard, most of the players will already know how a Pokedex works and how to train and battle wild Pokemon.

This quest isn't really MMO-friendly either, as the same looking man leading every new player around would clutter up the screen (among other things). 

Thanks for the-err heartfelt replies everyone. 

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Well simply its a quest before the pokemon league where basically you have to stop two teams from awakening extremely strong pokemon

*Tilts head*

This sounds kinda familiar....

Overall, I agree with Spirit on this. The plot is generic and holds no reason as to why its happening other then because the bad guys want to.

There are 2 grunts stood in your way of reaching your championship you talk to the grunts and they say "No one passes until our bosses say so" they ask you your favourite colour gold or silver(this will help later on)

so you start to walk off when you hear them talking about there teams bosses so you decide to eavesdrop you overhear them talking about where there bosses are located which is

1)Pharos(Soulcatcher's boss)
2)Snarule(Heartcatcher's boss)

so they reveal the location of the 2 bosses(which i will tell soon)

You start walking towards the door and who do you see non other than your rival the 1st thing you would think you need to battle him/her but no you tell (insert rival name here) about what you heard the 2 of you decide to split up and go find Pharos and Snarule(depending on colour you picked earlier on) if you picked silver you go face Pharos.if you pick gold you go face Snarule so you go to the locations(depending on the colour you picked)

I know grunts tend to be weak and kinda stupid in every Pokemon venture, but the question of 'what's your favorite color' just seems so out of place in this context that I have to wonder if much thought was put into this. Isn't there any other way the player could choose which team they go against? Why are the grunts clearly giving out vital information to their boss' plans? Typically, grunts know the least of the least of the high-ups plans, and only do what they are told at the basic levels.

I suggest you modify this a bit. Why not have have the choice to pick which color to go after the player and the rival team up? That way the player can simply chose: [Do you want to fight the Heartcatchers or the Soulcatches?]

Another thing to think about is the blandness of simply overhearing the locations of the bosses. Why not have the player look for them in a high level cave area, or some crumbling ruins? I don't know when before the Pokemon league you placed this, but it shouldn't be so easy as beat up trainers, beat up boss, blahblahblah.

when you get there you have to face a random amount of grunts before you reach the top,you reach the top you hear (depending on the colour you picked again) "Lugia(or Ho-Oh) i call upon you" Lugia(or ho-oh) appears (depending on if you can fight them or not not)

if you beat Pharos(Snarule) you finish the mission the rewards you get are the following

REWARD1=Rare candy(increases the selected pokemons level)
REWARD2=XP(needed for the pokemon to level up)
REWARD3=Gold(Money)Randomly generated by the PU Team

I like the idea of having to face legendaries in NPC player battles. It adds a cool twist to game.  But, in PU the Pokemon wont be new--as in the Pokemon wouldn't have to be awakened. Lugia and Ho-Oh are originally from the Johto region, so might the enemy bosses simple have been tracking them down and trying to capture them, instead of 'awaking' them?

I have nothing to say about your rewards though. I wouldn't face an entire team of bad guys just for a piece of Rare Candy. How about a cool Pokemon stat booster, or clothing for the player depending on which team they decided to face?

All in all, it was 5/6s boring to read. The 1/6 exciting part being the legendaries under the control of the bad guys. I think all you really need to do is put some more thought into the plot, and try and spice things up a bit.

Should people be limited to one account per IP? And if there are two or more people playing on the same IP, they have to apply for a second account on the forums? Or do you like the idea of allowing mules (you lazy bums)?

This.

Hm, I was about seven and was at home in my room. I was laying on my bed doing pretty much nothing with my light on. My room was pretty tiny, and the bed was to the left of a small entry way into my room--like right up against a wall, so if anyone came in they'd have to walk by the bed (and me) to get to the rest of the room. Anyways, I was staring up at the ceiling when a black--it looked like a head and shoulders(is what I could see)--something peeked out around the entryway wall and looked right down at me. I sat straight up and flew out of my bed.

And of course, my mother was in her room, and my brothers were playing video games in the living room. I also didn't here one sound from whatever it was.

I'm not saying it was a ghost, demon or whatever, I don't know what it was, but I do know that I saw it (and it looked like it saw me). It still creeps me out though. >.<

yayyyy for a PU story!!

Lol, maybe a PU story.

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i don't know what to say....im really jealous of your talent! this is the exact style of artwork i had imagined when i started inventing my own manga story, if i find the story i had worked on for it so far, would you be interested in collaborating with me?

Depends on what kind of story. xD If you wanted we could do some kind of weekly Pokemon story for PU though.